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Sample personal statements / Personal statement review

Now that the PSR has been up and running for some time I have noticed there have been a number of occourance where users have put their personal statement in the wrong section - ie applicants put their PS's up in the examples, or those who have already applied putting it on the PSR.

There are already warnings in place, and if I see someone has made a mistake i try to fix it as soon as possible - though it's hard to tell in some cases.

I'm thinking of maybe moving either the example personal statements or the PSR to another site rather than studential (along the lines of samplepersonalstatements.co.uk or personalstatementreviews.co.uk), to make the destinction clearer.

Does anyone have any thoughts on this or other ideas for what I can do to solve the problem

Thanks

Tom

01/09/2004 08:15 PM
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I think this is the phrase which causes the problem
'If you find the personal statements listed here useful, please consider donating your personal statement to Studential to help others in the same way. If you don't want to do that, at least leave a comment at the bottom of the page.'
I think if you rephrased it to say ' If you have found the personal statements listed here useful , then after sending in your application please consider donating your personal statement to Studential to help others in the same way next year. If you don't want to do that, at least leave a comment at the bottom of the page.'
That makes it clearer that the sample statements are from last years' candidates and it should prevent people donating their current PS

02/09/2004 10:52 PM
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RE: Sample personal statements / Personal statement review

yes...and in the form where you upload your statement, but a reminder in red at the top saying "Please only upload your Personal statement if you have already been through the UCAS system. If you have not been through the system, please use the PS Review section to get your statement reviewed.

Or something to that effect.

03/09/2004 10:51 AM
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For oncology

I have always been a planner. I knew from a young age that I wanted to be a physician,
so I planned my early education with this goal in mind, even choosing to take Latin in high
school to have a better grasp on medical language. I entered a direct acceptance program,
guaranteeing myself a place in medical school after finishing my undergraduate studies, and
leaving as little as possible to chance. To my surprise, it would actually be a random patient
encounter–and not my meticulous design–that determined the kind of physician I would become.
Halfway through my third year of medical school, I was still unsure of what field I
wanted to pursue for residency. One of my first patients during my medicine clerkship was a
young woman with anemia. I sorted through numerous lab results, poured over peripheral
smears, and even personally performed a bone marrow biopsy. Our evaluation led us to a
diagnosis of myelodysplastic syndrome. The challenge of delving into the pathophysiology and
learning how to make the diagnosis inspired me to pursue a residency in internal medicine. As
chance would have it, during my acting internship in hematology as a fourth year student, this
young woman was again my patient. Her MDS had converted to acute myelogenous leukemia,
and I admitted her for induction chemotherapy. During that month I saw a variety of cases, from
AML and lymphoma to thrombotic thrombocytopenic purpura and anthracycline-induced
cardiomyopathy. Initially it was the pathophysiology of these diseases that attracted me to
internal medicine and hematology/oncology in particular. However, after developing a bond with
this young woman, I found myself drawn in by the amazing relationships patients had with their
oncologists as well.
My interest in hematology and oncology was further confirmed during my residency,
when I spent a significant amount of time on the oncology service and in the outpatient practices.
I had the opportunity to see patients at different points along the disease spectrum – shocked at
diagnosis, frustrated during the complications, devastated at relapse, and hopeful for remission.
With these experiences I have gained understanding of the natural evolution of these disease
processes and the toll it takes on the patient both physically and emotionally. The idea of treating
both aspects of a person appeals to both my medical and psychology backgrounds.
One of the most rewarding aspects of my experience in medicine thus far is that my
research project involves the very same patients I see clinically. The immunosuppressive effects
of the various treatments for hematologic malignancies are well known, and a number of patients
receiving these treatments will unfortunately develop severe sepsis. My colleagues and I are
studying the utility of lactic acid and systemic inflammatory response syndrome criteria in
predicting patients in need of more aggressive intervention. Our ultimate goal is for earlier
identification of at-risk patients, allowing for potentially life-saving treatments and monitoring
before the development of overt severe sepsis. My interests also include immunology and
infectious disease, so this project is especially appealing to me.
In thinking about my career up to this point, I was surprised to realize what a role chance
seems to have played in leading me to pursue a fellowship in hematology and oncology. I am
grateful that I have experienced this, but now it is time to start planning again. Having trained in
strong academic institutions, I know this is where I want to stay. From my mentors I have
realized that an academic career in hematology and oncology allows the fulfilling combination of
treating patients, educating housestaff, and participating in patient-oriented research. In the
future, I would like to participate in translational research, with a specific focus on new targeted
therapies for malignancies. Both careful planning and chance have led me to hematology and
oncology, and I am excited by the prospect of a career that will be both personally and
intellectually stimulating for years to come.

21/11/2006 10:21 PM
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